E-Portfolio Writing Term 1

E-PORTFOLIO - Writing Term One

ACHIEVEMENT OBJECTIVES:

Structure:

L2: Organise texts, using a range of structures.

Indicators:

• Uses knowledge of word and sentence order to communicate meaning when creating text.
• Organises and sequences ideas and information with some confidence.
• Begins to use a variety of sentence structures, beginnings, and lengths.

L3: Organise texts, using a range of appropriate structures

Indicators:

• Organises written ideas into paragraphs with increasing confidence.
• Uses a variety of sentence structures, beginnings, and lengths.

L4: Organise texts, using a range of appropriate structures.

• Organise and sequences ideas and information for a particular purpose or effect;
• Uses a variety of sentences structures, beginnings, and lengths for effect.

Go through your writing and highlight examples of the following sentences.

Simple sentences - green

Compound sentences - yellow

Complex sentences - light blue

Welcome to animal airlines. We will be getting some amazing animals to help us today.We also have safety equipment and life jackets if the elephants break the plane.We have got jobs for our animals. The elephants can give you a cold relaxing shower, the monkeys make you slip on their banana peels and you could ice skate on them, and if you want a dance party we have the tui's that will do some great music. Also if you want the coldest air conditioning we have the donkeys here. So sit back and enjoy your animal flight. 

As we were about to take off there was an announcement over the speaker. Ladies and gentlemen we are just about to fill up the petrol tank. About 30 minutes later the plane was about to take of. A wee bit later we were in the air and up to 2000 meters and an announcement came over the speaker that the animals would come out soon, and you could get out of your seat belt in minutes 5 but suddenly there was a massive bang.


All the windows were broken as air was coming in and paper was going out the window. We had CRASHED into another plane coming into the airport. The plane hit the ground in minutes. Luckily we didn't smash into land or we would all be dead but we hit the water instead. Luckily the animals could swim as well so they wouldn't drown. There was a island nearby so we all swam to the island. After we were at the island I made an axe and chopped down a tree.  Then we made a shelter so all of us wouldn't be sun burnt. After a few days investigators came to save us and the animals and live happily ever after.